• I really enjoy the way you’re building the tension here. It is a very cinematic style of storytelling (meant in the best way). I like it.
    Just wanted to take a moment to share my appreciation for the writing.
    Also, the artwork is outstanding.
    Nice job!

    • Thank you sir! I hope you enjoy the coming pages too :D

    • Sebastián Píriz


  • Adriano #WR

    His name’s Lucas… George Lucas xD

    Even if there’s no action here, it is really a cool page :3
    Nice ciry.

  • Dreadogastus

    Yep. It’s quiet. TOO quiet.
    “Viktor! Deploy some drones for overwatch. Button up guys. Hostile ground. ADVANCE.

  • Quasitonality

    “Signal the town!” *HONK*
    I’m gonna use that line next time I’m waiting for someone outside their house.

    • HEhehe I hope you do. Please report on how it goes ;)

  • Penpencilandbrush

    “Honk Honk Honk” The army should use that as a “go ahead” signal!

  • Ummm….is there indirect-fire field artillery in this ‘verse? I feel a TRP pokin’ me. (Target Reference Point, used in calling for, and adjusting, indirect–plunging–fire.)

  • theRoUS

    Okey, conversation flow in the first and second panels didn’t go right for me. Moving Lucas’ first balloons more to the upper left would fix it — for me, anyway.

    • Yeah this is a page we’ve heard that sort of stuff about before. May fix it eventually :)

  • RTM

    Briefly thought I missed a page, but Tenzin just rapidly met up with a guy right immediately. Other than that, here we go, things are about to go wrong soon.

    • Chapter 1 struggles a bit with some of the balance of dialogue and action, but I DO get better at my writing ;)